While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
Our main issue is with the sample. It shows the character portrayal, so the issue isn't so much about the character but the actual writing quality. The prompts aren't engaging and make it hard for a player to tag into. We realize the character is a quiet one, but there are ways to make even passive situations more engaging. Thus we'd like to see a different sample that provides a better hook for players to help incentivize tagging the character.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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Our main issue is with the sample. It shows the character portrayal, so the issue isn't so much about the character but the actual writing quality. The prompts aren't engaging and make it hard for a player to tag into. We realize the character is a quiet one, but there are ways to make even passive situations more engaging. Thus we'd like to see a different sample that provides a better hook for players to help incentivize tagging the character.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!