While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The only thing we need is for you to change your third person sample a bit, particular the last few paragraphs. While we don't mind samples used for other applications, it's only when the sample's contents are generic and not made specifically for another game's premise. This is only because sometimes a game's premise may change how a character behaves or reacts, and doesn't quite fit with how a character would react in Empatheias. Thus we would rather have one that either is set to ours or is a generic one. That said, you do not necessarily have to write a completely new one—we do not mind if you just edited the sample to conform to other sample.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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The only thing we need is for you to change your third person sample a bit, particular the last few paragraphs. While we don't mind samples used for other applications, it's only when the sample's contents are generic and not made specifically for another game's premise. This is only because sometimes a game's premise may change how a character behaves or reacts, and doesn't quite fit with how a character would react in Empatheias. Thus we would rather have one that either is set to ours or is a generic one. That said, you do not necessarily have to write a completely new one—we do not mind if you just edited the sample to conform to other sample.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!