Unfortunately we've determined that your application had too many errors or did not meet up to our standards to allow a revision. These are the concerns with your application:
There were a lot of major things about the application that we thought were lacking. Given the breadth and scope, unfortunately the application did not meet our standards.
1) Background: While we do not need extensive character history or backstory, events from within the canon are just as important and could work just as well for this section. We believe that the events that were mentioned in the parenthetical should have been expanded on as they have potential to show Reynir's development throughout the story, at least up until his canon point.
2) Personality: We did not see much in terms of Reynir's flaws. All characters have them and the current application portrays him as more one-dimensional than he really is.
3) Abilities: We do not need explicit or detailed information regarding the abilities, but what's given is much too vague. You mention that there is some information about what mages can do, but you do not go beyond that. You do mention his abilities, but you didn't expand on how they would work. Most importantly, you did not tell us how such abilities would be affected and used in game.
You are free to reapply for this character in the next cycle or any other character in the current cycle.
Declined
There were a lot of major things about the application that we thought were lacking. Given the breadth and scope, unfortunately the application did not meet our standards.
1) Background: While we do not need extensive character history or backstory, events from within the canon are just as important and could work just as well for this section. We believe that the events that were mentioned in the parenthetical should have been expanded on as they have potential to show Reynir's development throughout the story, at least up until his canon point.
2) Personality: We did not see much in terms of Reynir's flaws. All characters have them and the current application portrays him as more one-dimensional than he really is.
3) Abilities: We do not need explicit or detailed information regarding the abilities, but what's given is much too vague. You mention that there is some information about what mages can do, but you do not go beyond that. You do mention his abilities, but you didn't expand on how they would work. Most importantly, you did not tell us how such abilities would be affected and used in game.
You are free to reapply for this character in the next cycle or any other character in the current cycle.