While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

First, there seems to be a lack of the required emotion sample. As a reminder, we require samples to have some example of the character's emotions affecting their environment. It doesn't have to be a huge thing! Just enough so that we as readers can see that something is happening.

Second, we would really like a clarification about Balder's abilities. What abilities were you hoping for him to have access to while in game, or how do you think they would be affected in Empatheias? In particular, the ability to summon angels may need to be nerfed or removed completely because their lack of existence in Empatheias. As a note, not all abilities need to be altered or removed. We are only concerned about the extremely powerful ones, such as the angel summoning.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!