While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
There are a couple of things we'd like to ask you to expand on the Personality section. A few things we'd like for you to touch on are Kon's motivations, particularly in Amatsuki, and contrast that to his real world life. Some of it is covered in the Background, but we'd like to see it framed within the Personality section as well.
We also did not see an emotion sample within the TDM thread. We did see that you understood its existence, but we require an actual active use or effect of it for our samples. We'll need you to write one in, but it does not have to be long!
As for his powers, it might be doable, but could you give us some examples of how it would work in Empatheias?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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There are a couple of things we'd like to ask you to expand on the Personality section. A few things we'd like for you to touch on are Kon's motivations, particularly in Amatsuki, and contrast that to his real world life. Some of it is covered in the Background, but we'd like to see it framed within the Personality section as well.
We also did not see an emotion sample within the TDM thread. We did see that you understood its existence, but we require an actual active use or effect of it for our samples. We'll need you to write one in, but it does not have to be long!
As for his powers, it might be doable, but could you give us some examples of how it would work in Empatheias?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!