While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

We noticed the Sample has a number of grammatical errors and odd sentence structuring that makes it difficult to read. You do not have to rewrite the sample, just clean it up and we can process it quickly.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!