While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The current Personality section is a bit too short for our standards. We'd like you to expand on it; you could consider expanding on points and include more about motivations, strengths, weaknesses, and more on the "whys" he acts the way he does. We also have some question about the following phrase, "Fran has never been shown to get hurt." What exactly do you mean by that? Is it due to his abilities? And if so, how would that reflect in gameplay?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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The current Personality section is a bit too short for our standards. We'd like you to expand on it; you could consider expanding on points and include more about motivations, strengths, weaknesses, and more on the "whys" he acts the way he does. We also have some question about the following phrase, "Fran has never been shown to get hurt." What exactly do you mean by that? Is it due to his abilities? And if so, how would that reflect in gameplay?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!