While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The current Background section is much too short for a written in version. While we don't require lengthy Backgrounds, we do require at least enough to show that the player recognizes major instances of the character and provide adequate summaries. If you do not wish to write it, then linking to a wiki link is perfectly acceptable. We'd also like to see an expansion on the Personal section. While you hit on most of the major points, it is much too brief and could be further expanded upon.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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The current Background section is much too short for a written in version. While we don't require lengthy Backgrounds, we do require at least enough to show that the player recognizes major instances of the character and provide adequate summaries. If you do not wish to write it, then linking to a wiki link is perfectly acceptable. We'd also like to see an expansion on the Personal section. While you hit on most of the major points, it is much too brief and could be further expanded upon.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!