While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

We noticed you included a lot about Yuri in the Personality section, but not much about Estelle. We'd like for you to expand more about Flynn's relationship with her and how his actions are affected by her, especially since the sample focuses on Estelle more.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!