While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
Although the character is a minor one, we'd like for you to provide a background that could help us at least give us a better idea of the character. As it is, we have nothing to base the Personality off of. While we don't require you to point out every scene Yayoi appears, we do need information about who the character is and at least some scenes or events that could give us an idea to help understand the character factually. It doesn't have to be very long, but at least enough for us to get an idea.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
Revision
Although the character is a minor one, we'd like for you to provide a background that could help us at least give us a better idea of the character. As it is, we have nothing to base the Personality off of. While we don't require you to point out every scene Yayoi appears, we do need information about who the character is and at least some scenes or events that could give us an idea to help understand the character factually. It doesn't have to be very long, but at least enough for us to get an idea.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!