While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

In regards to the Personality section, you mostly compare Roxas to Sora rather than talking about Roxas on his own. While we understand that he is the opposite of Sora, it would be better to write it as if we know nothing of Sora's personality and only mention it briefly. There is also very little in terms of how he develops throughout the game. Although some of it is written in the background, it should also be included in this section and delved into further.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!