While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
Fenrir's Personality is a bit bare bones at the moment. While we can see that she has a negative personality, there's not much that shows how she was before or how she changes. You mention she doesn't want to be a demon, but it's unclear what she would like to be. Thus we'd like you to explore that aspect more. For example, we'd like to see what you mean by how she "redeems" herself as well as how she "hides" her feelings.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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Fenrir's Personality is a bit bare bones at the moment. While we can see that she has a negative personality, there's not much that shows how she was before or how she changes. You mention she doesn't want to be a demon, but it's unclear what she would like to be. Thus we'd like you to explore that aspect more. For example, we'd like to see what you mean by how she "redeems" herself as well as how she "hides" her feelings.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!