While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

While you have a good Sample for River, we would like you to expand more on River's Personality. In particular, we would like to know less about her behavioral quirks and more about her as a person. We would like you to expand on her self-awareness, her worldview, how she feels about others/people in general, and what her current motivations for her actions are, if there are any at all.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!