While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
There are a couple of things we'd like for you to expand on Feora's personality. You've touched upon a couple of interesting facets, such as how she believes she's the one best suited to lead and mentioning her beliefs. Could you go into more detail about the kind of justice and faith she has? Is it purely religious or are there moral teachings or virtues that she also follows? We're also curious how much of her actions is out of justice or if she is more like a warmonger.
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There are a couple of things we'd like for you to expand on Feora's personality. You've touched upon a couple of interesting facets, such as how she believes she's the one best suited to lead and mentioning her beliefs. Could you go into more detail about the kind of justice and faith she has? Is it purely religious or are there moral teachings or virtues that she also follows? We're also curious how much of her actions is out of justice or if she is more like a warmonger.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!