While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

There is one point about Hata's personality we would like for you to expand upon. You mention that she is becoming more separate of the masks she wears, and we would like to see an expansion of that. For example, how is she evolving to show more of her own emotions and what kind of emotions are these? How does this make her different from how she was originally?

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!