While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

Everything looks well-written, but we had difficulty finding the portion for the emotional aspect of the sample. Could you either direct us to it or write a brief paragraph for that portion?

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!