While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

While the sample provided is a good portrayal of emotions, it's lacking the environmental influence. Rather than re-write the sample completely, we suggest just adding where the environment would be affected in the current sample.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!