While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
There's a little confusion regarding the character backstory we'd like to ask about! We noticed that you refer to events not mentioned in previous portions and the write-up doesn't include any of the Lost Shores events. However, we did see the abbreviated timeline at the bottom—which is perfectly fine for a storyline like Guild Wars 2! But it's because of it that we're a little confused about the timeline.
Is it correct to say/assume that Syrlya participated in all of the Living Story releases, including everything involved with Southsun? Or are there any parts that may have been excluded from his particular story? If so, we would like you to amend the character backstory portion just to clear this up and make the backstory flow a little more coherently. We don't need super detailed descriptions of the events. Just a sentence or two saying whether Syrlya was involved will be fine!
Also as a side note, we allow all kinds of magic to translate into Empatheias, including those that have canon specific "energies" or systems to work. So you can keep his mesmer abilities if you so desire.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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There's a little confusion regarding the character backstory we'd like to ask about! We noticed that you refer to events not mentioned in previous portions and the write-up doesn't include any of the Lost Shores events. However, we did see the abbreviated timeline at the bottom—which is perfectly fine for a storyline like Guild Wars 2! But it's because of it that we're a little confused about the timeline.
Is it correct to say/assume that Syrlya participated in all of the Living Story releases, including everything involved with Southsun? Or are there any parts that may have been excluded from his particular story? If so, we would like you to amend the character backstory portion just to clear this up and make the backstory flow a little more coherently. We don't need super detailed descriptions of the events. Just a sentence or two saying whether Syrlya was involved will be fine!
Also as a side note, we allow all kinds of magic to translate into Empatheias, including those that have canon specific "energies" or systems to work. So you can keep his mesmer abilities if you so desire.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!