While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The emotion sample is not quite correct! We are looking to see how the character's emotions are affecting the environment, so for instance is Hiyori's unease causing anything to stir or bring down the temperature? Simple things like that can work perfectly fine, so if you could add an effect in that should be all you'll have to do.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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The emotion sample is not quite correct! We are looking to see how the character's emotions are affecting the environment, so for instance is Hiyori's unease causing anything to stir or bring down the temperature? Simple things like that can work perfectly fine, so if you could add an effect in that should be all you'll have to do.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!