While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
While the foundation of the app and its content is solid, much of the personality is difficult to follow as a result of shifting between tenses and other grammatical errors. In addition, the Heart of Etro will need to be nerfed in-game: Caius will be allowed to be very durable, but as Etro has no presence in this world, he will not be able to retain his immortality or ability to immediately restore himself. He won't be able to have control over the flow of time in-game, and the Heart's summoning abilities will be limited. In addition, he will be unable to teleport off of the island or between settlements without using the in-game teleporters.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
Revision.
While the foundation of the app and its content is solid, much of the personality is difficult to follow as a result of shifting between tenses and other grammatical errors. In addition, the Heart of Etro will need to be nerfed in-game: Caius will be allowed to be very durable, but as Etro has no presence in this world, he will not be able to retain his immortality or ability to immediately restore himself. He won't be able to have control over the flow of time in-game, and the Heart's summoning abilities will be limited. In addition, he will be unable to teleport off of the island or between settlements without using the in-game teleporters.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!