While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
"For the role that Larsa plays in the story, the personality section is too limited. How does he feel about his country, for instance? How does he feel about the atrocities his family committed? How does he interact with people as a leader? If he's doubted as a leader because of his age, how does he react to that?
Additionally, please expand on the kind of magic that Larsa can perform."
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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"For the role that Larsa plays in the story, the personality section is too limited. How does he feel about his country, for instance? How does he feel about the atrocities his family committed? How does he interact with people as a leader? If he's doubted as a leader because of his age, how does he react to that?
Additionally, please expand on the kind of magic that Larsa can perform."
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!