While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
In addition to review of spelling and grammar errors, we would like to hear you expand more on Lenalee's relationships in canon and how they affect her personality, namely with Allen. We'd like you to expand on the details of her Innocence and the specific negative effects it has on her.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
Revision
In addition to review of spelling and grammar errors, we would like to hear you expand more on Lenalee's relationships in canon and how they affect her personality, namely with Allen. We'd like you to expand on the details of her Innocence and the specific negative effects it has on her.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!