While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
We'd like some expansion on Nathanos' personality. For instance, what kinds of decisions by Winrunner is he shocked by, and what kinds does he disagree with? What makes him disagree or not expect these decisions?
Additionally, what does he tend to think of others? Does he judge them as much as his outer personality might imply or is he more open minded internally? What makes him so condescending? Is he prideful in himself, or is there some other underlying reason?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
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We'd like some expansion on Nathanos' personality. For instance, what kinds of decisions by Winrunner is he shocked by, and what kinds does he disagree with? What makes him disagree or not expect these decisions?
Additionally, what does he tend to think of others? Does he judge them as much as his outer personality might imply or is he more open minded internally? What makes him so condescending? Is he prideful in himself, or is there some other underlying reason?
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!