While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

We would like to see Nightmare Knight's traits and various aspects of his personality presented in plainer language, without the use of narrative prose so we may understand the character better. We have various samples of applications linked in this post which you may use as a guide.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!