While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The organization in the Personality section was a little difficult to parse through as it sometimes jumps between topics that should be together (for example, the level of trust and how Eugene treats strangers vs. friends and loved ones) and some points are repeated in different places. We'd like to see this rewritten in a more cohesive manner. In doing so we'd like a little more discussion on Eugene's insecurities and whether and how they still affect him currently.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
Revision
The organization in the Personality section was a little difficult to parse through as it sometimes jumps between topics that should be together (for example, the level of trust and how Eugene treats strangers vs. friends and loved ones) and some points are repeated in different places. We'd like to see this rewritten in a more cohesive manner. In doing so we'd like a little more discussion on Eugene's insecurities and whether and how they still affect him currently.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!