While the application shows promise, there are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

For the Personality section, we would like to see a little more on how Dave's friends helped change him. Brief mentions of key events that lead to a change will suffice and doesn't need to be more than a paragraph or two.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have one week to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!